Project 5: “An Impartial View”: Tutor Feedback
My tutor commented that You
demonstrate a competent realisation of your ideas in a well presented and well-judged
manner. I like the editorial approach to this work which came across quite
strongly. This is though different to documentary and you need to investigate
those differences. Also: I very much like the approach you took to
the workflow of producing the story and the story gives an
effective grasp on the ideas to be communicated – without reading the text.
This is important as a photographer knowing that the majority is communicated
visually. However, he reminded me that I should be
working in the natural history and documentary genres for the major project and
the composite image (Image 4 of the set), whilst interesting and “different”,
was editorial.
Commenting on
the four individual images presented for the text free picture story he again
pointed out technical flaws or suggested improvements in composition that have
been noted. He felt that the pier was too dominant in the opening picture,
which was attended to link the gull with the seaside (see Image, below). The image of
the gull eating the crab was not quite sharp (probably at least partly because this
was actually a heavily cropped image, to concentrate on the “business end” of
the story: I’ll not be able to do this when I’m working on the major project!)
and it was suggested that I should “feather the edges” of the cut-out sections
to improve the appearance of the composite image.
Image
My tutor was complimentary regarding my
presentation of the four page “magazine” picture story, which I have to say
required quite a lot of work to put together and, within the strict remit of
the project, was probably not necessary! Comments included: I
think you have made a really good effort here. You have a good balance and
layout of images throughout the pages. There is good visual weighting on page 1
between image and text that makes it look quite genuine and the
second page has a good wildlife feel about it. It shows natural behaviours that
are fascinating and insightful for the viewer. The ledge image and the dropping
image both show more facets of the wild gull and look to be well seen and
captured. Good balance again visually well done. Page 3 is a good contrast of
marauding mobs and the ubiquitous chip! ……. the posters ……. make a good end to the
story.
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